SHEET WEEK 10 rodriguez worksheet

ENG 150 Rhetorical Analysis Peer Review Worksheet Instructions: 1. Please answer the questions below and, where possible, copy and paste examples from your classmate’s essay so that they can see exactly what is working well and what could be improved. 2. Sections that are copied and pasted must be enclosed in quotation marks, e.g., “my sister was the sunshine in our family” 3. Please be sure to use a professional tone. Sarcastic, rude, or condescending comments are not appropriate (and also not Christlike). Try to “peer review unto others as you would have them peer review unto you”—be clear, specific, and sincere! Name of the classmate you reviewed: ___Racahel Orlenas Rodriguez______________________ Title of your classmate’s paper: _____ Analysis of a Public Health Researcher’s Commencement Address_________________________ Peer Review Questions Peer Review Response Introduction, Thesis, and Organization Highlight one: excellent, good, fair, needs work Does the opening paragraph provide the context (who, what, where, when, why) of the speech being analyzed? If not, what is missing from helping you, reader, understand the circumstances under which the speech was originally delivered?? Comments/examples from the essay : Yes, the opening paragraph effectively provides context about Atul Gawande's commencement address at U.C.L.A. Medical School, including the speaker's background and the significance of the speech. The introduction effectively introduces the speaker and the purpose of the speech. However, it could benefit from a little more context about the specific occasion or event where the speech was delivered. What is the thesis of the paper? (copy and paste it or paraphrase it) Does the thesis set up both the topic and the structure of the essay? Thesis: The thesis is clear and effectively conveys the main argument of the paper. For example, "The impacting story with which Atul Gawande (2018) introduced and ended his speech appealed to the emotions of the graduates and helped the speaker achieve the objective of persuading the graduates to hold onto the principle that all lives are of equal worth." The thesis sets up the topic of the analysis (Atul Gawande's commencement address) and the overall structure of the essay. It outlines the main argument and what the analysis will focus on. Comments/examples from the essay: The thesis statement is clear and provides a roadmap

ENG 150 Rhetorical Analysis Peer Review Worksheet for the rest of the paper. Is the topic of each paragraph clear and follow the structure established by the thesis? Comments/examples from the essay : The topic of each paragraph is generally clear, and they seem to follow a logical order. However, without a stated thesis, it's challenging to determine if they align with the structure established by the thesis. Comments/examples from the essay: It would be beneficial to have topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph that explicitly state the main point of that paragraph. This would enhance the overall organization and coherence of the essay. Does the end of the essay give closure by connecting back to the beginning of the essay, especially the thesis? Comments/examples from the essay : The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points discussed in the essay and connects them back to the thesis. It reinforces the main argument and provides a sense of closure. Comments/examples from the essay: The conclusion successfully ties the essay together and reinforces the thesis. Evidence and In-text Citation Highlight one: excellent, good, fair, needs work For each rhetorical element analyzed, is there a clear example from the text? Are the examples integrated smoothly with proper citation? Comments/examples from the essay : Evidence and In-text Citation Highlight one: good Yes, there are clear examples from the speech that support the analysis. The examples are integrated smoothly, and the citations are generally accurate. Comments/examples from the essay: Overall, the use of evidence from the speech is effective in supporting the analysis. Also, do you see what looks like APA style in the in-text citations? If not, be sure to let them know what seems to be missing! Comments/examples from the essay : The paper is clearly formatted in APA format including the references and all in-text citations. Style and Mechanics Highlight one: excellent, good, fair, needs work Does the sentence structure flow smoothly? Did you have to go back and reread any parts of the essay to understand what was meant? Provide feedback and identify difficult to understand composition for your classmate. Comments/examples from the essay : Style and Mechanics Highlight one: good The sentence structure generally flows smoothly, and the essay is easy to understand. However, there are a few instances where sentences could be made more concise for clarity. Comments/examples from the essay: The overall writing style is good, but there are a few sentences that could benefit from simplification for improved clarity.