ENGL148_Week_7_Peer_Review_Worksheet

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Week 7 Peer Review Worksheet (The worksheet begins on page 2, but please review page 1 very carefully.) Stop. Are you reviewing a classmate who already has a review or reviews? Remember: Review a classmate with no reviews if at all possible. Required Resources  Your chosen classmate’s main post, and their Full Draft of the Argument Research Essay  Week 7 Explore Topic: Peer Review and Writing Workshops  Sample Argument Research Essay in APA Format Notes  You will complete the peer review worksheet on pages 2-3 of this document and attach the completed Peer Review Worksheet as a reply to the classmate’s initial post.  Peer Reviews are due posted by Saturday night.  Try to review classmates who do not yet have any reviews.  Do not copy or plagiarize in any way in the Writing Workshop. Very Important Reminders:  Be honest yet kind and supportive .  It is understood that you are not an English teacher. Writing workshops are not designed that way. Rather, this is your chance to commune with other writers for growth all around. Your answers to peer review questions will be based on your understanding of the concepts you are studying and on your approach to writing your own Argument Research Essay Draft body paragraphs in Week 6.  Students are not required to use the feedback given to them by classmates; this activity helps you see how many others have approached the assignment, how you can personally do better, and how you might support other learners.  Your instructor will not critique anyone publicly here. This is your space for interaction. Your instructor will post resources throughout the week for the class, but the instructor will not “butt in” on the review process.  Again, be kind and supportive in every word you write for a peer review.  The peer review sheet begins on the next page. You do not need to include this instructions/reminders page when you post the review if you do not wish to.  Type or write by hand- either is fine, as long as it is readable. ©2021 Chamberlain University

Your Name : (write your name here) The Name of Your Classmate Being Reviewed : (write your classmate’s name here) Peer Review Questions – Required – Please type your answers in the right-hand column below. Question/Task Answer/Explanation Read through your classmate’s paragraphs. What about it do you like best? Please share at least two areas you feel are done well, or appeal to a reader and explain why. The paper discuss’s healthcare disparities in communities of color in the United States. They explain how systemic racism affects these disparities, highlighting economic disadvantages, lack of access to resources, and increased exposure to health-harming conditions. The text also addresses the limitations of the Affordable Care Act and the importance of health insurance literacy. Provider bias and its impact on treatment decision-making for communities of color are also discussed. The classmate suggests addressing these disparities through education, cultural competence, health literacy, data collection, policy changes, community engagement, research, and advocacy. s Read through your classmate’s introductory paragraph. Based on this initial read-through, what is the student’s thesis statement? Write it in one sentence to the right. Explain how you know this is the thesis and why it is a strong thesis. If you are not certain what the thesis is, explain what is needed to make it clearer. The thesis statement in the introductory paragraph is not explicitly stated. However, the primary argument of the essay appears to be that healthcare disparities in communities of color in the United States are a result of systemic racism, insurance barriers, and provider bias. To make the thesis statement clearer and stronger, the student should explicitly state their central argument or viewpoint within the introductory paragraph to provide readers with a clear roadmap of what to expect in the essay. Read through your classmate’s Introductory paragraph again. Then, answer these questions about the supporting sentences: How many supporting sentences are there? Are there any short, choppy sentences that could be combined? How? There were four supporting sentences that provide relevant details about healthcare disparities in communities of color. While the topic is clear, the central thesis or main argument is not explicitly stated, and the connections between the supporting sentences and the central argument could be made more explicit. To make the paragraph clearer, your ©2021 Chamberlain University

Are you able to clearly identify the topic of the paper and the supporting details? What are they? If now, explain how the writer can fix it. Then, as a reader, explain how the writer could make the paragraph clearer. What details might be added? What generalities might be eliminated? In other words, how can your classmate help the reader really “do” the step better? classmate should start by explicitly stating the thesis, provide more context and transitions between the supporting sentences, and ensure that the supporting details are directly linked to the central argument. Read through your classmate’s body paragraphs again. Do they have clear topic sentences? Do the sentences flow smoothly from one to the next? Are there any places where you feel the flow is disrupted? Explain why and offer specific suggestions. If there are no places where you feel the flow is disrupted, explain specifically what your classmate has done to make the paragraph flow well? Is there a strong conclusion sentence for each paragraph that helps close out the topic? If not, how could they make it stronger? The essay discusses healthcare disparities in communities of color in the United States. The introductory paragraph does not contain an explicitly stated thesis but introduces the topic and provides supporting details related to systemic racism, insurance barriers, and provider bias. However, the connections between these supporting details and the central argument need improvement for clarity. The body paragraphs are not explicitly structured with clear topic sentences, making it challenging to assess their flow and structure. To enhance the text, it is recommended to organize the content into distinct paragraphs with explicit topic sentences, incorporate transitional phrases for smoother transitions, and include strong conclusion sentences for each paragraph. Read through your classmate’s conclusion paragraph. Does the paragraph clearly restate the thesis again in different words? Did the paragraph summarize the main points of the essay? If not, what is missing? Did the paragraph have a strong ending sentence to close out the essay? If not, what could the writer do to make it stronger? The essay doesn’t have a specific conclusion paragraph, making it challenging to evaluate its coherence and summary of the main points. The text does not include a clear restatement of the thesis, mainly because the thesis was not explicitly stated in the introduction. This absence of a thesis statement makes it challenging to determine if the conclusion effectively restates it in different words. STo enhance the essay, the writer should incorporate a well-structured conclusion that restates the thesis, summarizes the key points discussed throughout the essay, and closes with ©2021 Chamberlain University

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