Peer review for Nathan - Minas Semaie.
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Peer Review Form
1. REVIEWED BY: Minas Semaie
2. DRAFT AUTHOR: Nathan Shade
3. Time and date the draft was sent to the peer reviewer and cc’d to LaFever: 11/14 3:36 am
4. YES
OR NO: Does the paper appear to be at least 75% complete? (Feel free to add any
additional comments, e.g., if it was submitted as is, do you think it’d get a passing grade?) Yes, in my opinion Nathan well deserves a passing grade. He completed every necessary aspect of the paper including the word count and uses appropriate structure as well. It is evident that he took the necessary time to organize all of his thoughts as he constructed the abstract very well and sticks with what he states he will talk about throughout his paper. I think he would be able to accomplish an A- as the paper is as of right now! 5. ASSESSMENT: Does the paper address every point listed above under the “Paper
Guidelines” and “Paper Content & Format” headings? Provide brief but specific details
about what is included and what is missing. Address content and mechanics; explain and
provide evidence to support your claims: Paper does well as it follows the paper and content format as it has an APA cover page as well as all the necessary paragraphs in a thorough and professional manner. He does especially well in my opinion when discussing the different disciplines as well as the common ground portion as he ties everything together in relation to HIPPA and patient security. I especially like how he took the time to describe the key terms in a separate paragraph in order to avoid any confusion for the reader. A. Content issues: Is there a need to clarify concepts, reorganize paragraphs or
sentences in paragraphs? No. I personally believe that Nathan did a wonderful job organizing his paragraphs, I especially admire his placement and incorporation of quotes to further describe what he is trying to say when describing the perspective of the 3 disciplines. B. Issues with syntax, grammar, and mechanics: Identify spelling and
punctuation errors, as well as verb tense, pronoun agreement, comma splices. There are minor grammatical errors, I would recommend briefly reviewing and correcting
before submission of final paper. I would also recommend using a free grammar checker such as Grammarly if needed as well. C. APA citations typed correctly; note specific issues with in-text and
bibliographic citations.
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The reference page is where I would recommend spending some time to correct. Nathan did a great job at placing the citations in order as well as citing the correct sources that he actually discusses in his paper using in text citations. However, the spacing and placement of some of the citations were a little off and I would recommend using resources such as Purdue if necessary to correct for those mistakes. Although, Nathan found some very good sources that are
credible and were used properly in his paper to further drive the readers understanding. At the end of your assessment, comment briefly on at least two points regarding what is
done well and/or what needs work.
I believe there are several great points that Nathan included that I would like to mention. To begin, I think Nathan did a great job in his introduction to not use too much of his information
that he will use later in the paper but gives a brief introduction to the concept of the HIPPA regulations. Furthermore, he does a great job in each of his discipline paragraphs. For instance, when explaining the first discipline, Nathan does well by demonstrating the roles of medical administrating in providing security for patient data. Likewise, in his paragraph about Law enforcement, he explains the role of law enforcement and gives a great quote from HIPPA that further explains the true meaning behind it. Lastly, I would like to acknowledge his well-written common ground section of his paper as he does a great job in my opinion by restating the three disciplines and specifically talking about the connection between most of them without repeated what was already said. However, the few things that I would work on are just re-reading the paper to correct for any grammatical mistakes as well as reviewing the format for APA citations just to make sure you are all set. Amazing work though in my opinion, great job! 6. List the time and date when you returned the draft and a copy of this completed form via
email to the student. Draft Returned - 11/17/2023 2:30 pm
Rev. 11/17/2023
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