ENG106_Proposal_Peer Review Worksheet
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ENG-106 Peer Review Worksheet: Proposal Essay
Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.
Name of the draft’s author:
Erasmia Reynolds
Name of the peer reviewer:
Omowumi Akinsuyi
Reviewer
After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.
The essay highlights the growing need for special education programs and the lack of resources to support
them. It emphasizes the importance of addressing this problem and suggests finding supporters to help fund these programs. The implementation would require advocacy from teachers and school district officials. Overall, the essay effectively addresses the topic of special education and its challenges, but it could benefit from providing more specific examples and data to support the claims made.
After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.
Proposal Content and Ideas
How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this proposal?
The proposal's primary arguments are clearly stated in the paper's thesis statement. It lays out the issue of underfunding special education programs and the need of such measures in explicit detail.
How successfully does the paper focus on presenting a well-reasoned proposal?
• The article devotes sufficient time and effort to making a compelling argument. Advocacy and financing for special education programs are emphasized as means to combat the issue and its consequences.
How persuasively is evidence used to justify ideas and enrich the essay? More convincing evidence in support of concepts and to enhance the writing would be a great improvement. Incorporating additional statistics, research results, and real-world examples would
improve the case, however it does highlight the amount of students in special education and the fear of altering the educational system.
How effectively does the essay incorporate strategies that support proposals (e.g., categorical, resemblance, ethical claims, and cause and effect claims)?
• The essay uses effective proposal-supporting strategies like categorical claims (highlighting the need for resources in special education programs), resemblance claims (comparing the lack of programs in some schools with the potential loss of students and families), and cause-and-effect claims (connecting the lack of funding to the insufficiency of programs). These methods strengthen the proposal's case as a whole.
Organization
How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper? The beginning does a good job of hooking the reader by emphasizing the significance of special education programs and the value of providing additional support to children with disabilities. It explains why this is an issue and why it needs to be discussed.
Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below. The essay's argument is not made clear to the reader. The thesis is not explicitly stated; nonetheless, it may be deduced from the following: "Special education programs need more resources and funding to adequately support children with disabilities, and it is crucial to advocate for and invest in these programs."
How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?
• The essay's paragraphs, on the whole, expand upon the thesis statement and provide supporting evidence. Paragraph after paragraph details the issue at hand, its origins, its consequences, and the options available to address them.
How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay? The conclusion may have more of an effect if it were more powerful. Restating the thesis and emphasizing the significance of fighting for and supporting special education programs would make for a more effective conclusion than just summarizing the essay.
Format
How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format
?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Is the required minimum number of sources listed?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Language Use and Style
Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice
and tone.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing? Yes No Add optional clarification here
How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Grammar and Mechanics
Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Three things that I liked about your draft are: The issue of inadequate funding for special education programs and its effect on students with disabilities is brought into sharp focus in this article. The topic is stated precisely, so the reader may grasp its importance.
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The article acknowledges the need of advocacy and stresses the significance of doing so on behalf
of special education programs and the students who benefit from them. It recognizes the importance of activists in raising awareness and securing money for the problem.
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The article presents a solution by arguing that it is necessary to identify backers who can assist finance these initiatives in both public and private education systems. This is an example of taking the initiative to solve the issue at hand and provides a workable solution.
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Three things that could be improved are:
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Incorporating additional concrete proof, such statistics, research results, or real-world experiences, would strengthen the essay's argument about the inadequacy of current financing for special education programs. This would make the case more compelling and solidify the basis for the recommended remedies.
The essay would benefit from a more clear thesis statement being stated early on in the opening. This would provide the reader a sense of direction and aid in developing a consistent argument throughout the essay.
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Adding extra punch to the last sentence would strengthen the conclusion. Restating the argument and emphasizing the significance of supporting and fighting for special education programs would be more useful than just summarizing the article. An successful call to action relies on a compelling ending that sticks with the reader.
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