ENG106_Proposal_Peer Review Worksheet
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ENG-106 Peer Review Worksheet: Proposal Essay
Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.
Name of the draft’s author:
Tabria Wilson
Name of the peer reviewer:
Emerson Lamansky
Reviewer
After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.
Overall this essay on the proposal of legalized organ sales was very well written and met the majority of the assignment requirements. There is a great deal of evidence and information that focuses on the topics, without being overally wordy.With a few minor corrections, this propsal will very successfully meet the rubric and assignment requirements. After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.
Proposal Content and Ideas
How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this proposal?
The thesis statement is properally located in the introduction paragraph and introduces the main points that the writer will propose.
How successfully does the paper focus on presenting a well-reasoned proposal?
The paper gives give insight into why we need to legalize the sale of organs.
How persuasively is evidence used to justify ideas and enrich the essay? The evidence is effectively used and well-placed to prove the most important points to the reader.
How effectively does the essay incorporate strategies that support proposals (e.g., categorical, resemblance, ethical claims, and cause and effect claims)?
The essay very effectively incorpates a number of different strategies for a successful program. The author gives feedback to both dies of an argument.
Organization
How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper? The introduction has a solid hook sentence, while also effectively introducing the points that the author will discuss. The introduction gives a bit of a background on the supply of organs, while also introducing the proposal.
Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below. Regulating organ sales, with strict ethical safeguards and public awareness campaigns, presents a viable solution to the persistent organ shortage crisis by increasing the availability of organs for transplantation, reducing healthcare costs, and promoting the well-being of donors and recipients.
How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?
Most of the topic sentences continue the throught from the previous paragraph. This furthers the ideas while also developing the argument.
How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay? The conclusion does a very good job of wrapping up the ideas that the author presented in the body paragraphs while not introducing new information. Format
How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format
?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Is the required minimum number of sources listed?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Language Use and Style
Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice
and tone.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing? Yes No Add optional clarification here
How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Grammar and Mechanics
Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.
Yes No Add optional clarification here
Three things that I liked about your draft are: 1.
This is a very solid first draft that provides great insight into why legalization of organ sales should be considered.
2.
The thesis statement is very weel thought out and proivdes a good introduction to the main points.
3.
This essay shows a very solid understanding of academic writing and the APA format. Three things that could be improved are:
1.
While the minimum amount of sources were used, I feel that there could be more evidence showing up in the essay. It seems the evidence is pretty spread out. 2.
I think there could be more of a touching on the argument against why it may not be the best idea to pursue organ sales. While it is important to not over explain the opposing view, I think it was brushed aside.
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3.
There are a few areas that were repetitive.