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ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Rhetorical Analysis of a Public Document Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word. Name of the draft’s author: Kyron Coker Name of the peer reviewer: Emerson Lamansky Reviewer After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric. This essay covers the three rhetorical appeals of logos, pathos, and ethos and the way that the CDC used them on this webpage on ADHD. There is a brief description of the disease itself but that majority of this essay is going into detail on how the appeals were used successfully. Furthermore, there are peer- reviewed sources to back up any infromation given. After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet. Rhetorical Analysis Content and Ideas How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make about the public document he or she is analyzing? The thesis statement identifyies that the CDC uses logos, pathos, and ethos and then gives a very brief description of each. Therefore, I think that the the thesis statement effectively shows the main points. How successful is the writer’s summary of the public document under study? The author gives a pretty brief description of ADHD and who it may effect. Overall, they focused more on the rhetorical appeals then the information found on the public document. How effective is the writer’s explanation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance? The write gives an explanation of the rhetiorical appeals but there could be more details and claifying to go along with each. How persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay? Evidence is used to support facts on ADHD but not on rhetorical analaysis. The sources give a good background to the disease but could be more enriching.
How effectively does the essay’s content support the thesis by analyzing the document and evaluating its effectiveness according to strategies from chapter 3 of Writing with Purpose? The content of this essay supports the thesis because there is aways a fact to backup a statement. I feel that the effectiveness of getting the analysis of rhetorical appeals could have been better. Organization How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper? The introduction effectively introduces the disease as well as the thesis statement which tells the reader what to expect. There are a couple grammer mistake that make the introduction hard to engage with. Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below. "The document is truly effective at sharing the facts, influencing the reader, and providing their credibility. By doing this, the CDC has effectively employed logos, pathos, and ethos" How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas? Each paragraph has a topic sentence that immediatl gives a brief description of the rhetorical appeal. I think there could be some more variation in this sense. As for advancing essay ideas, the paragraphs are very similar and do not move in one direction. How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay? The conclusion is a simple summary of the essay. It has the right information to be a strong ending but at this time it is a summary. Format How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)? Yes No Subheaders need to be centered. Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format? Yes No Add optional clarification here Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format ? Yes No Source #2 is not formatted properally.
Is the required minimum number of sources listed? Yes No Add optional clarification here Language Use and Style Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone. Yes No Add optional clarification here How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing? Yes No There could be more sentence variation especially in each individual paragraph. How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words? Yes No Add optional clarification here Grammar and Mechanics Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction. Yes No Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement. Yes No In the introduction paragraph especially, there are some sentences that do not line up with the previous. For example, "ADHD is among the most common neurological disorders that are discovered within childhood but is often carried over into adulthood. This information will be instrumental in informing the general public about the issues" What information? Why will it inform the public? Three things that I liked about your draft are: 1. You had some great information on ADHD and provided the right amount of detail on the disease without making the whole paper about the disease. 2. You properally cited sources in APA style as well as most of the ssay is formatted correctly. 3. Each paragraph was direct and to the point.I never felt overwhelmed with statistics or information. 4.
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Three things that could be improved are: 1. Make sure to read over the essay before submitted and ceck for sentences that are dangiling or misplaced. Thid could lead to reader confusing. ALso when double chekcing make sure to keep everything in APA format. 2. I believe the description of Logos is off a little bit. It tends to be more about stating the facts to create connection between ideas. So what does the CDC do to mae their facts credible. 3. Your sources could be more varied. Even if that means one focuses on ADHD and the other focuses on rhetorical appeals.